Revising is an important step in writing. In fact, revising is most of what writers do. In this chapter, you will practice this skill with a focus on descriptive writing.
Read the paragraph below. What advice would you give to the writer?
In addition, melting ice caps can cause climate change. 99 percent of the polar ice consists of fresh water. Besides, most of the ice is floating on the sea. Hence, melting ice means two changes. These are the changes in salinity and temperature (Glick, n.d., para 13). Both salinity and temperature greatly affect the ocean currents. The Earth's currents are mostly steady, and The direction of the current usually remains unchanged. However, large changes in ocean currents might cause changes in the atmosphere (Jason Samenow, 2018, para 1). If the currents in the atmosphere were changed, huge natural disasters, such as long-term flooding, hurricanes, typhoons, and tsunamis, would occur frequently (curiosity.com, n.d., para 1). As a result, ice melt of the polar ice caps is very closely related to natural disasters caused by future climate changes.
Use these questions to give the author advice about how to improve it. Think about the function of each type of paragraph as well as how sources are used to support the main idea of the essay.
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